Monday, February 22, 2010

blank verse

You came toward me like a sweetest candy
Seduced me with your overwhelming charms
As a bird attracted to the berry
I fall soft into your warm opened heart

I gave you everything that you asked for
Empty but happy because you were here
Different than any other girls I met
You were special, like a diamond on sand

As if I was dreaming, you disappeared
After taking everything that I had
Without any affection left with me
You were normal sand, like any others

Throw me into deep and dark loneliness
Leave me until I suffocate and die
First beautiful but soon it depraves,
This is how all pretentious love works

1 comment:

  1. Revise these lines:
    You were normal sand, like any others

    Throw me into deep and dark loneliness
    Leave me until I suffocate and die
    First beautiful but soon it depraves,

    Loved your interpretation of love!! Good job showing!!

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